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三楼作文
1. 反复出现的college life会令阅卷人觉得重复
2.plays 第三人称单数
3. something disharmony....不定代词的定于 多用后置定语 eg. something good...一些好事
4. 第二段的开头句 恰到好处的重申
5. can also 也能
6. understanding each other
7. 总结，通篇很少出现语法错误，符合四六级考试的中等水平要求，个别句式可以进一步简练，多做写作练习，积累范文。
期待你的下一次作业哟：）
@赤小草

@静修爱的是你


能组织相对比较完整的句子。。。
各别段落语义不明确，加油：）

英语基础很好。。。
语言使用比较熟练。。。
字迹。。。
怪我没有勇气读完= -

整篇文章写作流畅，很少语法错误。
1. 注意英语句子和汉语句子的差别，第一个句子划线部分改成后面红字部分，简洁，明了。
2. 第二部分是of的后置定语
3. have 的意思涵盖很广，但这里表 运营 可以用RUN
4. it 改成 which 由简单句变成定语从句。
5. will 后应该接 动词原形。
文章表达语义清晰，有一定的语法基础，可以适当的结合一些模板进行写作练习。

特意抄写了一遍😭

Sunday
Today, I went to listen to a live, this is a voice actor share their experiences with everyone. He said that life in the community is not easy, There is not to have talent to have a good job. But also a wide range of contacts. The second is to dare to innovation. Voice action this professional very upset. More voice actors, less wages Then a play only forty dollars or more. I think it is hard to do this profession. I hope to help them a lot. So I want to made some cartoons or games, Then I went to got these voice actors that have no fame but stength. So that can give them a better development opportunities. So, in order to help more people, I want to more efforts to learn more well.

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