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好像社团能三天一水?因为感觉这里很多学霸所以来求指教!!!
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论点:The only effective wayfor government to encourage energy conservation is increasing the price ofgasoline and electricity.
观点:不同意
论据:
【1】we can develop and use more solarenergy.
【2】we can do some advertisement to remind people the importance of savingenergy.
【3】government can control the quantityof gasoline and electricity of different users.
结论:There are many ways forgovernment to encourage energy conservation. I do not believethat the only useful way is to increase the price of gasoline and electricity.
Nowadays, there are many energy problems that natural resourcebecome lesser and lesser. Therefore people should dosomething in order to save up energy. Definitely, there are many waysfor us to encourage energy conservation, especially for government. So I don’tagree that the only helpful and useful way to encourage energy saving is toincrease the price of gasoline and electricity to government.
First,in my opinion, we can develop and use more solar energy. The more solar energy we use, the less non-renewable energy we waste. Solarenergy is renewable energy and we do not pollutethe environment when we use it. So with the development of our technology, this is agood way to save energy. For example, now we often use solar energy so that theneed of gasoline and electricity decrease.
More over, government can make some advertisements toremind people the importance of saving energy. In order to reach the goal, our government can give out energy saving classes in juniorhigh schools or in universities, and it can put up posters in streets.In this way, many people will learn how necessary energy should be economizedand they will also understand how to take action.
In addition, controlling the quantity of gasoline andelectricity of different users is also an available way for government.Government can make a survey to find out how much gasoline and electricity differentusers use everyday, and then it can make a plan torestrain the daily energy quantity that can be used for every family.
Above all, I believe that it is necessarily for us to save energy, but I do not believe that there is only one way forgovernment to encourage conservation. Obviously, for government, it can open upmore renewable energy and can make advertisements. Furthermore, government cancontrol the quantity. Hence, increaseing the price of gasoline and electricityis certainly not the only effective way.


1楼2015-07-20 22:41回复
    开头结尾的第一句都是病句,其他都还比较通顺。结尾段没太起到总结的作用,可以在精炼一点。第二段重复太明显。其他我真觉得还好啊……托福作文能写成什么样


    4楼2015-07-23 18:50
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      IP属地:四川来自Android客户端6楼2015-07-23 23:05
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        托福作文用nowadays不如试试in this day and age这样?


        IP属地:北京来自Android客户端7楼2015-08-18 22:17
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          有的短语用的好像。。。不太对吧。。。


          IP属地:北京来自Android客户端8楼2015-08-18 22:17
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