In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?
Freedom plays a mandatory role in everybody?s life. We can see in today?As modernized era nobody likes to get some restrictions upon them, whether it would be a child or an adult. Some people think that there should have some strict rules of behaviour for children, but I disagree with this statement
Wherever it is a reality that sometimes more restrictions can cause more frustration in children, which leads to many other mental diseases as well. Morever they can be, behave like a stubborn. Sometimes they feel themselves under pressure, which can be a main reason for their poor performance in their field. In some cases children would be crazier to do these things from where we try to keep them away.
In other words ,we have to look for other aspects as well, like if we usually ignore our children‘s bad habits, then they can not be good human beings in their future life. (在这里最好用复合句,而且这样的观点也不严密,我们也可以这么说:Some of children are failed to be a good person without being proper guided.)Moreover if we never draw attention upon the children's social activities then they may be acquiring bad company. (中间缺乏衔接词语,意思不衔接)They should know regarding the value of respect for their elders. They should know the importance of relationships. They should know regarding their cultural values as well.
In a nutshell, I would like to say that children should be teach regarding the value of their customs, rituals and respect towards their elders for their future life, but most of the extra restriction should be being avoided. It would be better to make them good human beings in their coming future.(这段写的好的)