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【oasis求助】女孩儿们(男亦可),帮帮忙。关于爱情。

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1楼2011-07-15 11:39回复

    我只能凭感觉认为女生们可能是这方面的专家,我经验不足,且这件事不是关乎伯爵自己,而是我的一位同学,这种情况我又见所未见。
    我的这位同学喜欢上了一个女孩儿,他们是三年的高中同班。他们曾经关系很好,一度也互相有一些好感,一起学习,一起聊天,一起玩,一起约会,确乎有过些美好往事的,但是没有荣幸升华到男女朋友的程度。后来这段感情莫名其妙的淡漠了,但男方仍然执着于这段感情,男方有过几次表示,虽都被女方拒绝了,但是他们的来往倒还算没有决断,也像朋友一样;但男方还是因此心碎了,并且女孩儿坚持说自己一直有喜欢的人,虽然我们对此摸不着头脑。现在他们俩要一起在这个长长的暑假里参加去一趟德国的友好团,先前男方已经有了自知之明,认为自己已经不可能和这个女孩儿发生爱情了,就希望这次旅程中能有一个插曲为女孩儿送别,插曲是这样的——男方是以后要去国外学钢琴演奏的,这次旅程中有个小音乐会,男方要去大展身手。其中他选了三首曲子为女孩儿送别。在小音乐会上,演奏专为女孩儿准备的送别曲目之前,他有一段讲话,和一次献花给女孩儿的契机,各有一段演讲词在先,希望能好好地道出自己的心声,希望让自己不留遗憾的送别无法属于自己生命中的那个女孩儿。
    他将演讲稿交给了我,我改了一次,下面是这篇改稿,再改的时候我希望得到大家的帮助,到底怎么写这篇演讲稿,才能更通俗易懂,更出彩,更打动那个女孩儿呢?请女孩儿们、有经验者帮帮我想想办法吧,发挥文学的实用性就是现在。
    意见用中文提就行,英文直接补充也欢迎,因为是在德国演讲,所有肯定要说英语的。至于真帮不上忙也不要紧,他的稿子很精彩、很感人,也算跟大家分享一段爱情故事了。
    演讲稿见下面:
    


    2楼2011-07-15 11:42
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      Here will be three modern gentle pieces:’ ‘Playing Love’, ‘Snow dreams’ and ‘Annie’s Wonderland’. Before I play these pieces, I hope you can be patient enough to listen to a story about a girl in my mind now. In fact she is exactly the reason why I choose these three pieces of music. She and I were in the same classroom for three years. Because of the teacher’s arrangement of the order of our seats, we sat very close and that was the beginning of this story.Even now I believe that it was the God who blessed me and arranged that coincidence,endowing me with a chance to meet such a lovely girl. I just can’t forget her smile when I told her a small funny joke;just can’t forget her hard-work and effort while helping me translate the Japanese instuctions on the score into Chinese;just can’t forget our strolls in the small woods,beside beautiful blue sea and on the green grassland;just can’t forget how lucky I was when I was sitting beside her and watching her favorite film by her side.All of these seem to happen just on the day before,telling me how happy we were.As the time went by I realized I fell in love with her so deeply that for me,the sun rose and set with her.The days without her seemed dark and desperate and she was just the happiness that I was seeking for.Although she refused my love several times,my love remained,until today,until now. Every time when I think of our happy time together and realize that they will just never come back again,my heart aches as if that is the end of the world.Now she is sitting among you, far away from me .Annie, at this moment I know I am not the boy your heart is missing,I know you will never accept my love but I hope my music can reach to your heart wherever you are and tell you how much I like and miss you. Please accept them as my best wishes,wish the boy who is luckier than me can bring you happiness,just like I’ve always been trying to do.And I hope all of you will have the chance to enjoy the love of the person you love.Please treasure your beloved lover--although I haven’t had one,I know love is one of the most beautiful things in the world.
      献花前: I’ve made lots of mistakes and this maybe the greatest. Maybe I have hurt you, but please believe me that I never meant to see you sad. All I want to do is giving you happiness. I prayed to God every day for your love but no matter how hard I tried,you never accepted me.You can think that I am not capable of your boyfriend, But I hope you can believe that I love you so.Love you.
      


      3楼2011-07-15 11:45
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        看得出来这个男孩很优秀也很深情,其实我觉得女生应该不会拒绝这种人吧(女人心海底针,猜不透啊),除非是她心里真有人(有可能那是她拒绝的借口而已)。我十分庆幸我竟然读懂了这篇全英文,真的很深情,很真诚。目前暂时想不出来什么了,个人认为这样就很好了。不过如果是我对一个人没感觉而那人当众表达爱意的话会让我很厌恶,如果平常是好朋友应该是很为难。关键还是要看那女孩对你同学的看法和心里的分量的。


        来自掌上百度4楼2011-07-15 12:04
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          好吧……满篇英文懒得看QAQ……
          初二的英语第五仍然是个渣。
          …………


          5楼2011-07-15 12:10
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            虽然我是校园爱情顾问但是这个英文我还是算了吧


            6楼2011-07-15 12:20
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              表示我竟然把这么大段的英文看完了!
              我想说的是,好痴情的男孩子……
              好吧我给不出什么好的建议……【滚


              7楼2011-07-15 13:16
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                英语水平不是很高但还是懂了大意。觉得这样就很好了,好浪漫!如果那个女孩还对她有一点意思的话一定会被感动到的!


                来自手机贴吧8楼2011-07-15 13:24
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                  我居然也耐着性子读完了、、、
                  写的挺好的、、不过我也是很同意4楼的话、、一切还得看那个女孩,如果人家真的没感觉稿子再好也是、、、


                  10楼2011-07-15 13:28
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                    于是没时间翻译完啊有时间再翻译啦><


                    12楼2011-07-15 13:30
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                      你们都看了啊?
                      那我也看看 = =


                      13楼2011-07-15 13:33
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                        写得一旦复杂,念出来让别人听不懂就麻烦大了,德国同龄学生的英文水平跟我们差不多,我们的理念是力求最直白的表述,一点不能复杂。


                        14楼2011-07-15 13:48
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                          翻译的是谁?


                          15楼2011-07-15 13:52
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                            翻译是因为有人不想看。
                            听到9L说的话后我觉得是很简单直白,
                            翻译这实在是多此一举
                            所以说大家自己看吧。
                            就不留名了><


                            16楼2011-07-15 13:57
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                              原来如此~


                              17楼2011-07-15 15:01
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